I read it all and it was pretty good! It seems a lot like the Hunger Games, especially with the forest burning part to bring the people closer together. One thing I noticed is that you described the fence with the words basically. I'm not a writer, but I've been told not to do that by teachers in the past. It either is, or it isn't is what they have told me. This story read well and I'm curious about how the action is going to pick up. It looks like a pretty sweet story so far and the fact you've written 40 pages or so is incredible. Good luck!
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Ah yes, I read through it, and cringed. I'll go change that in the .doc file immediately. Thanks!
And yeah, it occurred to me that this might look like the hunger games, which was something I'd been trying to avoid. Well, gotta make something out of it anyway :P
Thanks for reading!
TL; DR
Fuck you.
Now there, you need to love and tolerate; no need to curse others with vile language.
*Sigh*. Just read it. Please.
Later today, I just woke up, you know.
Fair enough. Anyway, how're you doing, apart from the whole 'HI GUISE IM A BRONY NOW' thingy?
You should listen to the song I recommended on my NP; it's called 'Four Brave Champions [FULL]'.
Yes, I listened to it yesterday. Pretty cool song, if you ask me.
So why isn't it on your favorites?
Because 'pretty cool' doesn't quite cut it for my faves. It's close, but no.
Why you askin'
Classical =/= Maarten Style
Because in the future, I'll be producing that kind of music.
That... is not classical.
It IS classical; it just has a different atmosphere than the calm classic songs.
Four Brave Champions is a kind of Epic Classical; something suitable for war, battles, etc. especially LoZ.
Hm-hm, but I do like classic music, and this song is -in that case- no exception, but it doesn't belong in my favourites, that is all.
Anyway, I am interested what kind of music you will be producing in the next few months, you don't hear any negative shit from me here.
Mostly VG/D&B related stuff.
But more classical?
My laptop will not support a lot of VSTi for classical (I used one on Flow of Time and it almost made my laptop lag non-stop).
Ouch.
My â'¬5k promise has not been forgotten yet.
*Euro emoticon fail
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olololololololol you jelly?
wat
why
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EDIT: your comment looks truly retarded with your new username.
Welcome BACK! :D
Thank you!
i like fucking apples bitch.
live with it
Well I like smoking apples.
*cough*
AppleJack...you like fucking apples? You...penetrate apples with your dick?
Okaaaaaaay. Now things are getting awkward again here.
Srsly, look:
AppleJack 2 hours ago
i like fucking apples bitch.
live with i
^ likes fucking apples.
I'm sorry I just keep laughing at your user icon which makes all your posts so fucking hilarious.
EDIT: I mean, look at the post below. Imagine an innocent-looking creature like that asking another one why on earth would you do THAT to an apple? "You're supposed to eat them..."
STFU.
HAHAHAHA
When I see AppleJack's face smile while she looks at Cli's text and says 'I like fucking apples' it makes me lol.
Now I'm shuddering.
...*cringes*...
We need to hide.
And fast. What if he also becomes a bronyfag?
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WTLDR Welcome back happy clock day to ya.
MaartenC (Updated )
Thanks, same to you.
Btw, only first few paragraphs are relevant.